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PostSubject: Ennremmen, the blood knight   Thu Feb 25, 2010 11:22 am

Name: Ennremmen

Age: 30

Rank: (working on it)

Village: Working on it.

Type: Tai

Specialized: Swordfighting

Clan: (if approved) Mugenshi

Physical description: 6'10, wears heavy armor almost constantly, including a breastplate, as well as bracers and grieves, as well as boots. under this he wears a red outfit.

Personality: Bloodthirsty. so much, in fact, the cost of hiring him to do something decreases the higher his body count gets. theres even an equation! (10,000-100b=c, with b being his body count and c being cost) though he does have a soft spot for kittens for some reason.s

Likes: battle, killing things, war, strong opponents, kittens.

Hates: peace, negotiations, weak opponents.
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Background: Born of the Mugenchi clan, he was the prodigy born once in a generation. He was trained to use his kekkai genkai, until most of his clan died. it was good. he left and strated looking for jobs where he could kill things.

Weapon: Name: Onichi Sakenomi (Demonblood Drinker)
Type: Sword
Classification: Zweihander
Description: the blade is a dark crimson, seeming to be covered in blood. the blade's name is inscribed up the side.
Ability: The blade absorbs the blood of those that it injures, which the user can drink to regain blood after using his kekkai genkai. It only takes the amount that would be removed anyway, though. it also has a counter strapped to it to record a body count, but that was a later addition by the user.

Stats: Working on it.


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PostSubject: Re: Ennremmen, the blood knight   Thu Feb 25, 2010 12:31 pm

Ok, ragnarok, a few things.

For one, your main can't be a ronin. It unbalances things, we want ninja mainly to be in a village. There are plenty of spots we need people to fill.

I don't know if you're finished or not, but your profile is incomplete. For one, you didn't take out the description in affinity. It just looks messy.

As for your weapon, absorbing blood? That's far to broken. A simple strike could leave the opponent unable to fight. That's a no-go.

Also, if you're wearing full body armor, you're not going to be fast. At all. You can't be a speedy tank. Bring that down. You also can't have a 0 in a stat.

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PostSubject: Re: Ennremmen, the blood knight   Thu Feb 25, 2010 12:41 pm

erm... I guess i was not specific enough. it only draws a small amount per strike, the amount that would probably come out from the wound anyway.
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PostSubject: Re: Ennremmen, the blood knight   Thu Feb 25, 2010 1:01 pm

Hmmm...so any excess blood that spews from the wound is absorbed by the blade? I suppose that could work...

But my other points still stand.

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PostSubject: Re: Ennremmen, the blood knight   Thu Feb 25, 2010 1:21 pm

agreed. working on it. any spots in your village I can take?
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PostSubject: Re: Ennremmen, the blood knight   Thu Feb 25, 2010 1:22 pm

Actually, the Mist Village is doing pretty well member wise, sorry. Rock and Leaf need some shinobi.

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