Takaymaru, The Hurricane Swordsman

Name: Takaymaru, The Lightning Swordsman

Age: 36

Rank: Anbu

Village: Mist

Affinity: Lightning

Type: Tai and Nin

Specialized: Ichiryu, one sword style fighting.

Clan: N/A

Physical description: Takaymaru stands at about six feet tall and two inches, and weighing in at about two hundred and ten pounds. His hair is brown and stretches down to his shoulders and is mostly straight, though slightly wavy. He is very muscular and has tan skin. His eyes are a dark green. He has a scar going down his left eye and eyelid. He has a clean shaven face and wears a dark gray cloak with a large hood. The cloak wraps around the front of his body and the sleeves extend past his hands, an even extends to cover his ankles. He wears mahogany sandles with black leather straps. His sword is seen strapped to his back by a black cloth.

Personality: Takaymaru is a very calm, laid-back person. He sometimes smokes cigarettes, though only when he feels he needs to calm himself and clear his mind. This is sometimes a little too often, as people aggravate him. This is how he maintains his calm nature most of the time, which allows him to think more than fight. When his opponents try to psyche him out with petty insults, it rarely works against him.

Likes: Daydreaming, organized fighting, friendly sword sparring, smoking, storms and rain in general.

Hates: Deserts, dry areas in general, sunny days, antagonizing people, persistent people, impulsive or otherwise irrational people.

Background: He was born in the mist village, during a thunderstorm. He cried very little, and was intrigued by the sounds of the storm instead of being frightened by them like most children are. He was quiet as he grew up, very s8lent around elders and very respectful. His father trained him in the way of the sword, but he was talented from the start. Talent was only half of it, though. His father taught him skill, and combined with his talent he grew into one of the seven swordsman.

Weapon: Sword
Name: Shippouittou (Hurricane Sword)
Type: A very large double-edged bastard sword.
Classification: Bastard sword
Description: The sword is about ftwelve feet in length and one side is extremely sharp, the other side being layered with very large spikes. The hilt is longer than normal sword hilts. It has about a foot and a half in width, the spikes being anywhere from two inches to three and a half inches.
Ability: No ability.

Nin: 4
Tai: 4
Gen: 1
Intelligence: 2
Speed: 4
Power: 5
Chakra amount: 4
Chakra control: 3
Seal speed: 2
Jutsu/Seal knowledge: 1

So the sword has control over three affinities? How much chakra must he combine with the sword to create large scale hurricanes? How long does it take for the hurricane to happen? And it creates a vacuum? Does that mean it pulls the foe closer, while the lightning hits them?

Ritz wrote:

So the sword has control over three affinities? How much chakra must he combine with the sword to create large scale hurricanes? How long does it take for the hurricane to happen? And it creates a vacuum? Does that mean it pulls the foe closer, while the lightning hits them?

Minor control. Using them all at once in a large quantity would deplete his chakra and cause him physical strain rather quickly.

He cannot create large scale hurricanes. A hurricane itself is massive, just look it up on a weather map of one, it takes up way too much area for one man to control. He creates smaller versions, so small they wouldn't be seen on a map. Basically the size of maybea small town.

To form a small hurricane? It's like a freak storm, it happens within a matter of minutes.

Yes, a vacuum, but the pulling effects aren't major, maybe a few inches at most.

alright, i gotta say, you can't wield wind, water and lightning. and i'll say this already, mako already uses quite a few storm and lightning jutsus.

take out the storm generating part. too uber. too uber for a sword at least.

so the blade sends lightning bolts out? seems...generic...and splitting the air apart? that's way to uber. it would be able to cut through anything if it can do that. so take that part out too.

I have to agree with Dark. Too uber with the vacuum effect, three affinities is too many also for a weapon.

Accepted. ^_^

looks good, just some minor stuff

change your rank. 7 swordsmen isn't a rank. you would be anbu

and you shouldn't have a 5 in ninjutsu if you only have a 2 in chakra control. fix the stats around.

other than that, approved.

Thanks Ritz, Dark. I fixed the rank/stats.

Aside from the obvious spelling mistakes, like s8lent and ftwelve, I think it's fine. After you make the changes like Dark said, I'll approve.

Haha, thanks to you too teX. My spelling mistakes are what makes me unique, that and my spell checker is horrid. Besides, I never liked grammuh.

great. approved

Ha, Sano. Your sarcasm just lost your approval.

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Approved.